Me wandered into the Garden of Eden
petals of all hues and apples laden
the green carpet under my feet
felt a cool wet sheet
Butterflies flitting and flirting
Me chased with happiness squirting
ran hither and thither
but the winged fantasy rose higher
Me gasping for air, waited
limbs tired with breath abated.
The coiled creature around the tree,
beckoning with a sly smile , in glee
stood transfixed , hypnotized.
the angel in me realized
the demonic design
but the devil in me , whine
Tempted , tantalized to savour
the forbidden fruit flavour
A land of sunshine and rainbow
of sweet honey meadow
Promising me the land of nectar
stupid of me to fall prey to predator
I yielded to my downfall
No rainbow after the rainfall
Eternal dark grey gloomy weather
Till date hasn't got better.
FOR : TRIFECTA
Wow.That is an excellent piece of tantalizing poetry.Well done,Kalpanan
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DeleteNice poem! The last sis lines are unexpected.
ReplyDeleteThanks for reading Ushaji.
DeleteThanks for reading Ushaji.
DeleteThis is a nice poem about the fall. I especially like the part about the encounter with the coiled creature.
ReplyDeleteWish this encounter never took place and humans would have resided in the Garden of Eden.
DeleteWhat a cool, poetic twist on a familiar story.
ReplyDeleteYou take the reader on a poetic and tasty journey, well done. Love the rhythm of your piece and the final couplet.
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petals of all hues and apple laden... so pretty!
ReplyDeleteYou drew us in like the serpent did with the apple, Kalpana! Nice one.
ReplyDeleteA nice poetic expression for the first story!! Good one, Kalpana :)
ReplyDeleteExceptionally beautiful, Kalpana...thoroughly enjoyed :)
ReplyDeleteKalpana,this is excellent ,full of rich imagery and I loved the sing song feel of the initial stanzas,lulling one into a false sense of gaiety-only to be rudely awakened by the harsh truth in the last lines-am wowed:-)
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