Monday 23 September 2013

If only you were here...........

prompt is provided by Kajal Kapur of Rainbow Hues. The prompt:

If only you were here



Today Simran wanted to stay out till 11 in the night for her friend’s party. I 

refused permission and she said that I was being a Victorian age mom. She 

cried and shut herself in her room.  Rajesh , if only you were here, things 

would have been very different. I need you in these delicate situations.




Mom no longer has faith in me. All my friends will be enjoying the party except me.

 Their parents do not object. Papa, if only you were here, things would be better.

 Tell God that your princess misses you a lot.  Come back.



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12 comments:

  1. Anonymous23 September 2013 at 09:45

    Too touching. An irreplaceable loss for both of them. :'(

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  2. Anonymous23 September 2013 at 16:03

    Nice post, your usage of "if you were here" from two different viewpoints takes the cake...

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  3. Sreeja Praveen23 September 2013 at 23:04

    Loved the two dimensions of thought ! Kudos to you !!

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  4. Anonymous24 September 2013 at 05:05

    Touching poem. You have beautifully put two point of views diametrically opposed to each other.
    Thumbs up
    Vishal

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  5. Anonymous24 September 2013 at 05:05

    Touching poem. You have beautifully put two point of views diametrically opposed to each other.
    Thumbs up
    vishalbheeroo.wordpress.com

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  6. Vishal Bheeroo24 September 2013 at 05:06

    Touching poem. You have beautifully put two point of views diametrically opposed to each other.
    Thumbs up
    www.vishalbheeroo.wordpress.com

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  7. Obsessivemom24 September 2013 at 07:23

    Beautifully put. Only if each of them could think from the other's poin of view they could have shared their loss.

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  8. Kajal Kapur24 September 2013 at 09:23

    Awwww....so beautiful :)

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  9. Anonymous24 September 2013 at 10:01

    In the tumult of disbelief and anger both are thinking from their point of view...nicely written post

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  10. Anonymous25 September 2013 at 02:25

    That empty space remains in all hearts. Nicely done.

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  11. Mina Menon26 September 2013 at 00:57

    Both are heart-touching! Neat...

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  12. Ruchira Khanna28 September 2013 at 19:12

    aww! hugs to both of you!

    beautiful and right in their own ways

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