Sunday 29 September 2013

The Untrodden Path





The branches intertwined
kissing each other
remind of you and me.

The smoke filled clouds
raging against each other
remind of you and me

The hard stone steps
on which we ran together
our fingers intertwined
our lips raring to meet.
the occasional outbursts
settled at the edge of the pathway.
remind of you and me.

Our laughter echoed through the vale
as our spirits plunged down ,
only to rise ,  unseen to the cruel world.



for : The Mag

11 comments:

  1. Lovely and tragic. The repetition of "remind of you and me" brings the reader into the narrator's obsession. Well done.

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  2. I enjoy the refrain... almost like the rain clouds in the sky of the poetic image.

    THANK YOU so much.... very engaging!

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  3. I enjoyed your interpretation of this image- especially how you saw the tree branches.

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  4. A beautiful poem, with an under current of pathos.

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  5. Whoa, that was certainly an "abrupt" ending!

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  6. I like the repetition. It was effective.

    =)

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