prompt is provided by Kajal Kapur of Rainbow Hues. The prompt:
If only you were here
Today Simran wanted to stay out till 11 in the night for her
friend’s party. I
refused permission and she said that I was being a Victorian age
mom. She
cried and shut herself in her room.
Rajesh , if only you were here, things
would have been very different. I need you
in these delicate situations.
Mom no longer has faith in me. All my friends will be
enjoying the party except me.
Their parents do not
object. Papa, if only you were here, things would be better.
Tell God that your princess misses you a lot. Come back.
FOR : WRITE TRIBE
Too touching. An irreplaceable loss for both of them. :'(
ReplyDeleteNice post, your usage of "if you were here" from two different viewpoints takes the cake...
ReplyDeleteLoved the two dimensions of thought ! Kudos to you !!
ReplyDeleteTouching poem. You have beautifully put two point of views diametrically opposed to each other.
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Touching poem. You have beautifully put two point of views diametrically opposed to each other.
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Touching poem. You have beautifully put two point of views diametrically opposed to each other.
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Beautifully put. Only if each of them could think from the other's poin of view they could have shared their loss.
ReplyDeleteAwwww....so beautiful :)
ReplyDeleteIn the tumult of disbelief and anger both are thinking from their point of view...nicely written post
ReplyDeleteThat empty space remains in all hearts. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteBoth are heart-touching! Neat...
ReplyDeleteaww! hugs to both of you!
ReplyDeletebeautiful and right in their own ways