Sunday, 29 September 2013

The Untrodden Path





The branches intertwined
kissing each other
remind of you and me.

 The smoke filled clouds
raging against each other
remind of you and me

 The hard stone steps
on which we ran together
our fingers intertwined
our lips raring to meet.
the occasional outbursts
settled at the edge of the pathway.
remind of you and me.

 Our laughter echoed through the vale
as our spirits plunged down ,
only to rise ,  unseen to the cruel world.



for : The Mag
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11 comments:

  1. brenda w29 September 2013 at 11:54

    Lovely and tragic. The repetition of "remind of you and me" brings the reader into the narrator's obsession. Well done.

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  2. Julie Jordan Scott29 September 2013 at 11:59

    I enjoy the refrain... almost like the rain clouds in the sky of the poetic image.

    THANK YOU so much.... very engaging!

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  3. Gillena Cox29 September 2013 at 13:03

    Have a nice Sunday

    much love...

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  4. Kathe W.29 September 2013 at 13:12

    I enjoyed your interpretation of this image- especially how you saw the tree branches.

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  5. Tess Kincaid29 September 2013 at 13:13

    Lovely and bittersweet...

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  6. Berowne30 September 2013 at 02:19

    Pleasurably engaging...

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  7. Unknown30 September 2013 at 02:50

    A beautiful poem, with an under current of pathos.

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  8. J Cosmo Newbery30 September 2013 at 04:15

    A lovely take on the prompt.

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  9. Unknown1 October 2013 at 07:31

    Whoa, that was certainly an "abrupt" ending!

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  10. Susan Anderson2 October 2013 at 12:41

    I like the repetition. It was effective.

    =)

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  11. hyperCRYPTICal3 October 2013 at 01:51

    Life is like that.
    Anna :o]

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please show some love......

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