Friday, 18 October 2013

Fear

 We are looking for a 33-word explanation of what scares you (or your character).



I tried to change sides but the closed

box gave me no freedom. As the waves tossed the box,

I tried to shout, feeling breathless and constricted,

I awoke and the nightmare ended.


20 comments:

  1. And the fear becomes going back to sleep. Nice use of the prompt!

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  2. What a horrible nightmare. Good piece.

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  3. I'm with Renee, the dream is over but when you go to close your eyes, (sure of course that it was just a dream) sleep is evasive.

    Nice write.

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  4. Nightmares and claustrophobia! Yep, don't like it!

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  5. My chest feels tight and breathing is difficult. Yes, this is a nightmare! Sometimes the frightening thing is how real it feels.

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  6. Nightmares of being trapped in a little box are terrifying when you are claustrophobic. Great job recreating the panic in so few words! ♥

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  7. Getting back to sleep after such nightmares are always difficult.

    Nice work with the prompt!

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  8. Love how you portray the simple panic in this. Glad the nightmare ended! Thanks for linking up and don't forget to come back and vote!

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  9. Yikes that was scary!
    Most excellent thing about nightmares is when you wake up : )

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  10. I don't think I would be able to fall asleep after that.

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  11. Nice...I can imagine the feeling. My fear is lizard.

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  12. The endless loop....will it ever end! Nice!

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  13. Actually reminded me somewhat of the movie Life of Pi, being stuck in the ocean, only this time it was a box and not a boat.

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  14. Imagine the horror! and Jairam is correct it reminded me too..

    Richa

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  15. Good and terrifying take on the prompt!

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  16. Scary, indeed. Well done.

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  17. Nightmares, well described. Sweet dreams.

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  18. I'm in the box suffocating. Great writing!

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  19. Uff....may be I am being stupid, but it did remind me of Loss of life. Great writing !

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  20. Dude - that fear is no lie. One I won't even admit I have, it scares me so.

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