This time your entry has to have one sentence that is repeated at least thrice in your post.
“Whatever we plant in our subconscious mind and nourish with repetition and emotion will one day become a reality” -Earl Nightingale
Staring at my S.S.C (Senior Secondary Certificate) mark-list , I was aghast and the next thought that came to my mind was how I would face my mom. The figures reflected the quantity and quality of effort put unwillingly by me while my classmates regaled with satisfied smiles and laughter at their score-card. My teacher gave a scornful look while handing over the piece of paper as if the judge had awarded me a death sentence. My classmates said nothing to me but Shreya , my best friend , squeezed my shoulder as a sign of paying condolences to me.
With poor statistics , the prestigious junior colleges refused entry into their tall gates. My classmates and me were segregated by a barrier , a barrier caused by a wafer thin paper called mark-sheet. Only I was to be blamed for this situation. I wish I had made better use of time and my potential.
I WISH I HAD LISTENED TO MY MOM
I came to the city of my dreams much against the wishes on my mom. I had to prove to her, to the world and to myself that I could achieve a lot and was not a failure. I wanted my mom to be proud of me.
Endowed with good natural looks and a towering personality , my entry into the modelling profession was smooth. This fraternity embraced me lovingly with open arms as much as I embraced it into a tight hug.
Print advertisements , ramp walks and photo-shoots came up my way and Ma Laxmi paved my road to success. Here the statistics of my SSC mark-sheet was not valid but vital statistics mattered.
I saved enough money to buy a 2BHK flat in Mumbai while my classmates were preparing for exams and spending pocket-money. I was living in and out of suitcases and I had become a gypsy, globe-trotting the world, condensed to a village.
Missed calls from Shreya accumulated in my cell-phone . The varying time-zones made it difficult for me to keep in touch with my loved ones. Intention to do so was weaker.
The glitz and the glamour of this make-believe world made me lose my self. I had the world at my feet but mom cautioned me of the path strewn with thorns. But the melody of the jingling of the silver coins made me turn a deaf ear.
I WISH I HAD LISTENED TO MY MOM
The daily booze , drugs and fame was a deadly concoction and I had injected it into my veins. My devil-care attitude , arrogance and lack of respect for the very people who propelled to stardom , caused my downfall.
The flood of modelling offers started to trickle down and eventually dried up. But I refused to see the signals and saw red in all advises hinted by the well-wishers.
I was alone in my Mumbai flat. With time to while away and negative thoughts crowding my head , I became a slave to my daily dose.
The telephone rang. Shreya had to attend a job interview for the post of a trainee engineer at a reputed firm in Mumbai and would stay with me for two days. How would I face Shreya? I would be branded as a failure.
I consumed an extra dose of barbiturates.....................
Shreya turned on the television set in her living room. The news of suicide of a famous model was flashing on the screen.
A note was found I WISH I HAD LISTENED TO MY MOM
was scrawled on it.
P.S. :- This story is purely fictional and does not intend to show disrespect to any person or profession nor aims to glorify the figures on the report-card.Any resemblance to a person or incident is purely co-incidental.
This post is a part of Write Over the Weekend, an initiative for Indian Bloggers by BlogAdda. We give out themes for creative writing each weekend for Indian bloggers.
Staring at my S.S.C (Senior Secondary Certificate) mark-list , I was aghast and the next thought that came to my mind was how I would face my mom. The figures reflected the quantity and quality of effort put unwillingly by me while my classmates regaled with satisfied smiles and laughter at their score-card. My teacher gave a scornful look while handing over the piece of paper as if the judge had awarded me a death sentence. My classmates said nothing to me but Shreya , my best friend , squeezed my shoulder as a sign of paying condolences to me.
With poor statistics , the prestigious junior colleges refused entry into their tall gates. My classmates and me were segregated by a barrier , a barrier caused by a wafer thin paper called mark-sheet. Only I was to be blamed for this situation. I wish I had made better use of time and my potential.
I WISH I HAD LISTENED TO MY MOM
I came to the city of my dreams much against the wishes on my mom. I had to prove to her, to the world and to myself that I could achieve a lot and was not a failure. I wanted my mom to be proud of me.
Endowed with good natural looks and a towering personality , my entry into the modelling profession was smooth. This fraternity embraced me lovingly with open arms as much as I embraced it into a tight hug.
Print advertisements , ramp walks and photo-shoots came up my way and Ma Laxmi paved my road to success. Here the statistics of my SSC mark-sheet was not valid but vital statistics mattered.
I saved enough money to buy a 2BHK flat in Mumbai while my classmates were preparing for exams and spending pocket-money. I was living in and out of suitcases and I had become a gypsy, globe-trotting the world, condensed to a village.
Missed calls from Shreya accumulated in my cell-phone . The varying time-zones made it difficult for me to keep in touch with my loved ones. Intention to do so was weaker.
The glitz and the glamour of this make-believe world made me lose my self. I had the world at my feet but mom cautioned me of the path strewn with thorns. But the melody of the jingling of the silver coins made me turn a deaf ear.
I WISH I HAD LISTENED TO MY MOM
The daily booze , drugs and fame was a deadly concoction and I had injected it into my veins. My devil-care attitude , arrogance and lack of respect for the very people who propelled to stardom , caused my downfall.
The flood of modelling offers started to trickle down and eventually dried up. But I refused to see the signals and saw red in all advises hinted by the well-wishers.
I was alone in my Mumbai flat. With time to while away and negative thoughts crowding my head , I became a slave to my daily dose.
The telephone rang. Shreya had to attend a job interview for the post of a trainee engineer at a reputed firm in Mumbai and would stay with me for two days. How would I face Shreya? I would be branded as a failure.
I consumed an extra dose of barbiturates.....................
Shreya turned on the television set in her living room. The news of suicide of a famous model was flashing on the screen.
A note was found I WISH I HAD LISTENED TO MY MOM
was scrawled on it.
P.S. :- This story is purely fictional and does not intend to show disrespect to any person or profession nor aims to glorify the figures on the report-card.Any resemblance to a person or incident is purely co-incidental.
This post is a part of Write Over the Weekend, an initiative for Indian Bloggers by BlogAdda. We give out themes for creative writing each weekend for Indian bloggers.
This was such a nice powerful take on the prompt. Leaves us all with the message that end of day, our mothers want only the best for us and we need to at least hear them out before dismissing their words carelessly.
ReplyDeleteLovely Post and even though it is a fiction it is a reality for many. Nicely written and thought provoking!
ReplyDeleteVery well-written, Kalpana! Really moving story of a Fashion Model...
ReplyDelete"Here the statistics of my SSC mark-sheet was not valid but vital statistics mattered."
Similar to the 'Fashion' movie, that Madhur Bhandarkar based on Research.
But, this is common in the glamour world!
A story which has all sentiments, expressed in a very powerful note! Nice imagination, Kalpana.
ReplyDeleteNice read ...Mothers are always a good guide !!!!!
ReplyDeleteNice post especially for the message it conveys...
ReplyDeleteGood read..Thanks for sharing
Well, Moms know best isn't it. Beautiful and touching. At one point I almost got lost in the wonderful writing, and had to re-read the post to check the repetitive line. Thats how well you weaved everything together. Amazing job!
ReplyDeleteThough fictional it relates to the society of today. Nice take on the prompt...
ReplyDeleteThat is a wow post! Very nicely woven but sad story. This is fictional but probably the fate of many.
ReplyDeleteVery nicely expressed!
ReplyDeletenice one, sad, but beautiful in its message...lovely !
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ReplyDeleteOh! Sad! Wish she had listened to her Mom! :|
ReplyDeleteBeautifully written. Such a sad story full of what if's. If only she had listened to her mother...
ReplyDelete"Advices"? Not good!
ReplyDeleteRest neatly put together. Kudos...
Yes! All listen to moms. :D
ReplyDeleteAwesome! lovely take on the prompt...
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