Friday, 22 November 2013

raised bar


Write Over the Weekend theme for this week

This time your entry must contain, ‘This time, she raised the bar…’


She looked at Ayesha and tried to search for any  trace of emotion of surprise. And there was none on the calm focussed face. She stood straight , her legs joined together , arms by her side , with the fingers pointing downwards. Her athletic body , of years of training had learned to take the rigorous regime of the sport. Never did Ayesha complain nor was she the cause of any complaint to her coach.

She moulded easily and perfectly as wet clay under the tutelage of her coach Anita.

Coach Anita , without her gaze shifting from her loyal pupil ,'This time, she raised the bar a notch higher than had been anticipated . But as usual , Ayesha's facial expressions remained unflinched and with a spring Ayesha broke into a sprint and  cleared the raised bar with a slight effort but landed smoothly.

Coach Anita puffed her chest with pride and inhaled a powerful draught of air.

She showed the thumbs -up sign to her pupil and Ayesha smiled. They packed up for the day. It was almost night. But Ayesha knew that the next day she would have to practise her high jumps more effortlessly. The Athletics Meet was exactly a month away.

The energy of the packed stadium was infectious but the competitive spirit was not lost among the participants. Äyesha Khanna" as the name was called, Coach Anita signalled her pupil to take her place.

Ayesha , this time, she raised the bar of expectations in her mental frame of mind....................

The stadium roared as the cheers reached a crescendo.

The chief guest picked the gold medal from the tray and Ayesha bent down from her pedestal to lower her head to accept what she richly deserved.

The thunderous applause of the crowd added to the rich haul of the medal. But Ayesha had'nt heard a single sound , for  her eyes only rested on her mother and coach ,  Anita Khanna whose moist checks glistened with pride and passion.

Anita communicated to her daughter ,  through sign language ,  her fingers dancing in the air. Anita looked up at the Heaven and said , 'Jai Mata Di'.

P.S. :- Anita Khanna , an ex-athlete , had given birth to a dumb and deaf girl. Anita was asked to abandon the girl child due to the unfavourable sex and disability of the new-born. But Anita refused and walked out of her marriage to bring her daughter up , single-handedly.

Anita , this time , had met her expectations and had no regrets. Ayesha could not talk nor hear but her sport and talent spoke volumes and made people hear and take notice of her.

This is the work of fiction and any resemblances to persons or instances , is purely co-incidental.

This post is a part of Write Over the Weekend, an initiative for Indian Bloggers by BlogAdda.



  1. Very nicely written.I could not guess the touching end.God,in His infinite mercy, does compensate for loss of one or more faculty with abundant skill in some other areas provided they are found and honed as Anita did in Ayesha's case.

  2. Powerful write up. Kudos to that mom, in fact to all moms.

  3. I have nominated you for the Liebster Award (at because I always enjoy seeing your posts in the challenge grids. Thanks, C.C.

  4. Great take on the prompt Kalpana. Loved it :)

  5. Great take on the prompt, Kalpana. Loved it !

  6. Powerful writing and a powerful woman. :)

  7. Narratives like this one inspire and guide us. Lovely take on the prompt, Kalpana. Kudos to your story and thoughts.

    Joy always,

  8. I had gooseflesh. This story though fictional I wish is a reality for many handicapped children. I hope they find bigger rounds of success to prove to this world how nothing can stop human will and passion...


  9. Simply brilliant kalpana . ..just awesome story :)

  10. Ah! That's a good one. I wrote a story on similar lines too! :)

  11. Beautiful. It was such a simple story but had so many elements. The P.S stole the show :)

  12. It was good overall but the climax left me speechless. Wonderful take on the prompt :)

  13. You have spun a brilliant story out of imagination.Here I kept racking my brain for some real life incidents. Kudos to your effort and imagination

  14. wow. great writing.ayesha raised her bar. inspirational story.

  15. lovely take on the prompt... inspirational.

  16. This was such a beautiful heart warming take on the WoW prompt. Loved it a lot

  17. How heartwarming is this...beautifully done for the prompt!

  18. A brave story. Congrats

  19. Such a powerful, heart warming story! This proves that no matter who you are you can accomplish anything. Awesome! ♥

  20. Such a lovely story! I share my name with the Coach & Mom! WOW! they turn out to be the same person! How inspirational!
    In today's age, when perfectly normal girl-child is snuffed out, it takes full focus & faith to raise a disadvantaged child. Kudos! May the tribe of such parents increase!

  21. Really well-written and deserving! :)



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